英语作文练习001

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前言

本分类旨在练习本人英文写作水平,结构一般为原文修改文组成,内容一般为日记形式的任意内容,注意修改的方法参考的是GPT的答案。

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原文

Wednesday,August 9th,2023,Rainy

Today,I start to have a try for practicing my English writing skill finally. To be honest, I'm indeed worried about the status that I have not even finished the basic learning which should be done before this month, but I just finish the half.

Hope I can hold on my mind,and keep on going.

That's all, the first of my diary for my thinking. Hoping it will not be bullshit,I mean the grammar.

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最终修改结果

Wednesday,August 9th,2023,Rainy

Today,I finally started to give it a shot at practicing my English writing skill. To be honest,I'm indeed anxious about the fact that I have not completed the fundamental lessons which should be done before this month,but I have only finished the half of it.

Hope I can stay focused and keep going.

That's all for the first of my diary for my thinking. Hoping it won't be nonsense,I mean in terms of grammar.

1.日期

Wednesday,August 9th,2023,Rainy

没毛病

2.第一段

Today,I start to have a try for practicing my English writing skill finally.

首先,语法上:

start to动词时态错误,应该是过去式,改为started to。在以下情况会用到一般现在时(注:并不全面):

  • 表示经常的或习惯性的动作,常与表示频度的时间状语连用。
  • 表示主语具备的性格、能力和特征。
  • 表示现在的状态。
  • 表示客观事实和普遍真理。
  • 有些表示状态和感觉的动词表示现在发生的具体行为时,只用一般现在时,而不用进行时态。
  • 表示现在发生的具体动作或存在的状态

其次,内容表达上:

have a try是小学僧语法,建议改为attempt to或者give a shot

finally放在后面有点语句不同,可以直接放在最前面,即:I finally started to...

最终修改为:Today,I finaly started to give it a shot at practicing my English writing skill.

To be honest, I'm indeed worried about the status that I have not even finished the basic learning which should be done before this month, but I just finish the half.

首先,语法上:

I'm这里后面表示的是一种状态,所以可以用一般现在时,但是but I jsut finish明显错了,改成finished,但是为了一致都用一般现在完成式have finsihed

其次,内容表达上:

be worried about小学僧语法,可以替代为be anxious about增强情感,或者使用be concerned about表示偏理性地担忧。

the status感觉有点不顺口,表达的是状态、地位,可以改为fact,表示描述已经发生的事实,even也有点不顺口,删掉。

basic小学僧表达,改用fundamental或者essentialfinish小学僧表达,可以改用complete,感觉还是小学僧表达啊?

before用法是没问题的且准确的,这里我想要表达的是在这个月之前就要完成,如果使用by意思就变成了在这个月结束之前完成,意思就不对了。

最终修改为:To be honest,I'm indeed anxious about the fact that I have not completed the fundamental lessons which should be done before this month,but I have only finished the half of it.

3.第二段

Hope I can hold on my mind,and keep on going.

首先,语法方面,没有毛病;但是内容表达方面hold on my mind属于拉稀英语词组,表达非常不流畅且属于自创词组,可以改为stay focused或者remain determined,同时句子太短没必要分个逗号。

最终修改为:Hope I can stay focused and keep going.

4.第三段

That's all, the first of my diary for my thinking. Hoping it will not be bullshit,I mean the grammar.

首先,语法方面,没有问题;但是内容表达上,bullshit为俚语,主要是过于粗俗,建议替代为nonsense或者rubbish,表示胡说八道,然后就是当使用感叹句来表达希望时,通常不会使用否定词not,即连起来使用won't(?GPT这么说的,我也不知道啥意思),最后I mean the grammar意义表达不通顺,改为I mean in terms of grammar,in terms of 意为:就...而言。

最终改为:That's all for the first of my diary for my thinking.Hoping it won't be nonsense,I mean in terms of grammar.